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Submission

June 29th 2008 22:06
I submitted Moonshadow's Guardian.

October 31st.

By then I will know.

Pray for me, wish me luck, whatever.

Sorry if I'm blogging on and off for the next little while, my internet access is severely limited.



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Synopsis V. 2

June 14th 2008 17:29
Demons: not what you might expect... but not very nice either. Riana is a demon forced to return home and face her 'Family's' trial for a 'crime'. At Home she is rescued from them by Loki, and now she is to protect and guard Moonshadow-and its royal bloodline.

Riana sets out to destroy the telepathic plague that clings to the youngest member of the royal line... and along the way falls in love with a vampire named Andre. The two ride off on Rolf, their dragon, in the midst of night... they destroy Lari, an ancient queen... and then Andre loses his sight and his sanity.

She must return to the capital bearing this news and bringing survivors of the restoration of Riminira as the city burns. When she returns... there is always more bad news. Soon she sets out with the survivors of Riminira to colonize the 'Wastes', the old country. Andre comes with her and they colonize the ancient City Of The Endeared.


As they rebuild the culture of Shalinor or the 'Wastes', Riana finds herself entranced by a library which tells her of her past... what she ignored... and finds herself forging a friendship with a shadow of sorts, the Librarian.

It is when the Librarian and she fight that she becomes friends with Nathan, leader of the Moonshadow army; he approaches her and they begin speaking. War breaks out and the city is attacked more than once... In one attack, Nathan dies.

Riana returns to the library-to find that the Librarian is gone, faded away. After losing her only two friends, she becomes miserable... but at the end of the Librarian's story she reads her own epiphany. A boy from Tar'Ig'Voe, the warring nation, comes to speak with her.

The boy asks for her help with the rebellion-and she provides, not happy with herself for that or any reason whatsoever-she takes down a royal family and puts a new one in place.

She returns to Moon Kurai, the capital, to find that Jacob I is returning... many years later, she writes her own story, condemning her to death, as is dictated by the gods...
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I'm going to be submitting this in 15 hours for various reasons so I need opinions on the synopsis for Moonshadow's Guardian. Anyone who is willing to read and give a basic critique of the book (it's short, about 250 odd pages double spaced) just post your email and I'll send the file to you.

All comments and crits are much appreciated. Here goes:

In Moonshadow's Guardian, we follow Riana, a demon who defies the traditional definition of 'demon'. We discover that she wishes to remain with the humans, in peace. She is brought back to the demons' 'Home' before being rescued by a god, Loki, from the angry hands of her 'Family'. Riana is then sent to protect the nation Moonshadow and its royal bloodline. In doing so, her first duty is to destroy a plague obviously created by a Telar, a telepath.

Riana travels to the ancient city of Riminira with challenges, and on the way she falls in love with a vampire named Andre, of the royal bloodline of Moonshadow. In Riminira an ancient woman, Lari, is using the victims of the plague. Their souls leave and souls from her ancient culture return. Riana and Andre travel on their dragon, Rolf, to destroy Lari, going ahead of the camp. Lari's ancient power source is destroyed and Riminira burns to the ground.

She returns to Moonshadow with survivors of the old country, Shalinor. They begin to rebuild Shalinor as a faction of Moonshadow. She leads a group of colonists, displaced from the burning of the town, to the ancient City of the Endeared. Old memories of her first Summoning to the human plane return to haunt her and she begins to do research in the ancient, magically preserved library there. The Librarian, a shadow being, aids her with his knowledge of the library.

War breaks out between Moonshadow and another nation, Tar'Ig'Vor. Riana fights with the Librarian and makes a friend of the army's leader, Nathan. She sees the Librarian one last time before the city is attacked, and they make a deal. Nathan dies in battle, and when she returns, the Librarian has faded away to nothing.

Riana makes an alliance with the Tar'Ig'Vor rebels and destroys the old royal family, putting another family in its place. She then returns to the capital of Moonshadow, where the original monarch, Jacob I, a vampire, returns with his wife Beth to lead Moonshadow into the Golden Age.

Riana lives happily for many years with Andre... and then she writes her story, and with it, condemns herself to death; the ancient punishment of the gods invoked.
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Carpal Tunnel

March 27th 2008 05:41
Well I haven't been here in ages and OF COURSE when I want to get back into writing a lot more, I get something that MIGHT be carpal tunnel.

Now doesn't my life just suck?
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So it's not quite every day yet...

February 21st 2008 15:29
However I have been writing! I've been writing quite a lot lately, actually, and the other day I sent out two of my poems to small no-pay markets. I need to get my name out there somehow, even if it's just 'I was published by Unheard of Magazine 1', ya know?

I've been very hard-working, studying, looking at things, reading, writing, all sorts of things lately. My school attendance is still lacking and that is simply because I don't care. I don't care about my education. Really


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Stress leave

January 31st 2008 13:58
I'm on hiatus for reasons not writing-related. Mostly my mother.

More details in this post, on the other blog (language warning


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Stories...

January 28th 2008 20:02
My latest story is based off a premise I've been thinking about a lot lately:

'Those who we call crazy are rarely mad or truly insane. They are visionaries and geniuses, men and women of brilliance whose visions we cannot see. Many see visions of the future, visions that terrify them, things that frighten them into madness. And thus we have the cases of madness we see most often, and we have the cases of insanity, the cases of suicide


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Writing Work

January 22nd 2008 21:26
I'm praying right now. Praying that I'll get a big gigantic break in my writing. I'm looking for places to submit one of my short stories to (the one that's been sent around and around) and praying that someday SOMETHING will come along.

Right now I'm also on the lookout for poetry competitions and publishers. I'm looking everywhere and hoping that something soon will come through. Within a couple weeks I should know if one of my pieces is getting published


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Writing Is Difficult Without Computer

January 20th 2008 00:35
I've got very, very limited computer access right now (as in I only have it at my bf's), so my writing is flopping and so is my blogging.

But I AM alive. Yay.
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Writing Work

January 14th 2008 16:11
I'm coming back with a vengeance. I'm writing again-yay-and I'm looking for places and web opportunities to submit to. I'm looking for places to put my writing again.

Right now I'm praying that somehow I'll find a way to become a writer within two years, a way to earn the money to get out of this hellhole I'm forced to call home


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Been Sick But I'm Back Into It

January 14th 2008 04:16
I've been getting hugely back into my writing as I recover from my stress sickness. I'm getting seriously into it because I want to make a career out of this.

This is my life, this is my dream, this is my career. It is everything to me and it is my only passion-honestly, it's the only thing other than my spirituality that I care about


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Not much to say

January 8th 2008 20:10
I wrote a couple poems, but they sucked pretty badly. So guess what? I've got nothing else to say, I'm just updating to update.
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Writing stuffses

January 6th 2008 22:39
So. My life is dull, boring, and nothing unusual. I mean, seriously, nothing unusual. Okay, that's utter crap, but hey.

I'm going through an incredible dry period when it comes to writing. Seriously. Even getting up the motivation to post here is an incredible amount of work. I don't have much else to do, though, so I figured I'd write up a post


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So here's my plan. I'm going to spend the next few days doing market research. I'm going to write out a list of likely markets and listing those here. That way I'll be motivated to write and submit, and you guys will see some possible markets.

I'm going to restart this blog fully ASAP, it's just I need some time to get myself organized and to get myself with ideas. Eventually everything will be back in good shape around here, but it will take some time [ Click here to read more ]
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