Prompt of the Week: Alone
August 24th 2010 12:58
I'm all alone out here
and for the first time
my mind is clear;
all the stress of the city
just fades away
I'm so glad
I got out yesterday.
I've figured things out
though I'm not jumping for joy
I don't like the decisions I've made
but I've gotta do
what I've gotta do
though I'll hate
saying goodbye to you.
Going out there I felt so free. For the first time I was traveling by myself and with my own money and it felt great. I slept on the dock and I didn't mind it. What's better than to be alone on a cool summer night with a beautiful lake? Possibly not getting eaten by the local musquitos, but I don't mind the bites.
Exactly what I needed, that's what I said this trip would be. I left Toronto confused, my only thoughts those of escape, and I returned with certainty in my steps. The path ahead can be seen for miles, though the sharp rocks are sure to cut my feet. I must pause now, take a breath and brace myself for the pain.
And in just a few weeks, I will surely know pain.
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Comment by RedParrot
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New voice this week. Hope you enjoy.
Took me a while to figure out what to say. Had I more time, I think I would edit down the words to be more ... uh ... sharp and exacting.
Curiously ... I find myself sad to "leave" these FFs at about 500-600 words. I have this nagging feeling that I have not said all there is to be said.
Your work this week created very pointed sensations ... of loss, resoluteness, aloneness. Which was the point of course ... Still ... It was satisfying to read. I think you are able to articulate things we all feel (context may be different) but the sensations are the same. I think that's a mark of good writing ... to get the reader to feel things purely by words. If you think about it - that's a really awesome thing.
Looking forward to more ...
Cheers!
RP
Comment by Dianna G
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Fictional Worlds
That was a very interesting piece. I enjoy the voice. There's a deep power and a deep sorrow; with great power comes great responsibility. And in the way it is written you see that part of him is ready to move on, though he will not.
I also like his sentiments about Elgin. I think it's true from what I've seen so far and I think that Elgin is one of my favourite kinds of people. Always able to be exactly who and what they are and want without getting into too much trouble.
I'm really glad you liked this piece. It's very close to my heart at the moment. Though the loneliness-being truly alone for an entire night for the first time in a long time-was deep, it was calming. I do like to be alone at times. When my mind goes crazy-and it does that often enough-I need to be alone, to meditate, to think things through. I got that chance on my trip and it was great.
This weekend will probably be pretty awesome too, though I'll be in Toronto. I'm having a birthday though
~Dianna