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Prompt: Just Kill Me

November 27th 2008 11:51
A friend of mine-very close online friend-recently got dumped and may or may not live through the aftermath of the breakup, so here goes:
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Just Kill Me

Just kill me
For ever dreaming I could be happy
Take my heart and make it bleed
'Til there's nothing left to see
But a stain on a dead woman's
Empty chest.

Just kill me
For ever thinking I could smile again
And have it be real for more than a moment;
Please rip my heart out
I don't want it there anymore.

Just kill me
Make my heart your trophy

It hurts too much for me
It'll look good
On your mantelpiece.

Just kill me
For thinking I could be happy
For more than just a second
A short second
Of a short day.

Just kill me,
You know you want
To see me bleed.
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Comment by Chris Champion

November 27th 2008 12:41
Ouch, ouch, ouch. You've caught it wonderfully. Or should I say painfully?

Oh, the cycles of love. If one more person says "growth opportunity" at a time like that, I'll break Cupid's damned little arrow and shove it ... sigh. Never again. Never! Ooh, hello there ...


Comment by Dianna G

November 27th 2008 12:44
Very nice, Chris. And amen to breaking Cupid's arrow.

I also poured juice all over my precious blanket.

Great morning...

~Dianna

Comment by Kleonaptra

November 27th 2008 22:36
Just kill me,
for I have killed.

This murderer's hands
grow sticky with blood

So many too many
innocents,

and it was not indiscriminite,
I pick and choose

who shall live and
who shall die

As if I were god
or the great goddess,

I chose your death,
over another's

Not the first time.
Just kill me,

I am not God
Though I play his hand,

Just kill me,
before I kill again.

Great prompt for me today Dianna.

Comment by Dianna G

November 28th 2008 02:45
Kleo,

Very nice. Always glad to see you writing

~Dianna

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