Nanowrimo: Excerpts
November 6th 2008 09:54
Here are 3 excerpts, one from each of the stories I'm working on:
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Story 1-Elf's Shadow (needs a new title)
Suddenly the world shattered around me, taking him away with it, crashing around me. My eyes
opened, and I found myself in the cave. Milan was outside, and I somehow knew it was her voice that
had broken through into my dreams. The thought made me almost smile. The girl had power, beyond
that of any ordinary human. She was strong, and though it may hurt, I knew she would overcome the
trial that she faced outside.
The ashes were falling and I watched, wondering what she faced out there. If she was caught,
trapped beneath the falling ashes. The very thought of ashes pouring upon her-or myself-made me sick
to my stomach. To be caught in that...
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Note: Ashes=what she calls the rain when she speaks of the darkness. Milan is another character, who has just lost her father and is struggling with her own trials, and has saved Emilia from a nightmare in this fashion.
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Story 2-Untitled (Because it's not the story I was planning, it's what my character made me
write. Little beeep)
It was the dawn of the world, and the sun was shining. Back then it was a very different place;
the dawn was quiet as the world fully shaped itself. The trees stretched for miles with nothing to
interrupt them but mountains and ocean. Back then there were no men; there was no mankind. It
simply did not exist.
It was before even the Elves, and it was beautiful. Everything was fresh and new. The first bird
sang to the sun and the trees. They were green and bright, happy and strong, alive and well. The
mountains were hidden behind clouds of fog, the ocean a sparkling blue going for miles, further than
the eye could see-and for me, it was far indeed.
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Note: That's about the beginning of the world, same world as the other one is set in.
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Story 3-Nimara (I gave into her demands to be featured in a novel)
There is a woman who they say has traveled all the world and conquered it. They say that she
has ruled; and that her kingdom was taken, destroyed by a Goddess. They say that she committed a
vile act, and that this is why her kingdom was destroyed. They say that she was a ruined woman, but
that she soon went to sleep, to wake in a thousand years and regain what she had lost.
They say many things about this woman, who is meant to sleep in a great, ruined castle upon
the blackened hill in the center of the dead capitol. Its walls of stone like an impenetrable fortress
surrounded by rubble and despair. Its cold bricks and empty hallways. Nothing is left of it but an old,
dead ruin.
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Note: Nimara was originally a character who came out of nowhere in my RP, and she has developed a fascinating story, so I am writing hers as a separate thing without any actual RP characters in it, though there will be dedication to my RP friends.
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I hope you liked them! I'll probably post some excerpts later in the month as well, though I'm not sure.
----------------------------- ----------------------------- ------------------------
Story 1-Elf's Shadow (needs a new title)
Suddenly the world shattered around me, taking him away with it, crashing around me. My eyes
opened, and I found myself in the cave. Milan was outside, and I somehow knew it was her voice that
had broken through into my dreams. The thought made me almost smile. The girl had power, beyond
that of any ordinary human. She was strong, and though it may hurt, I knew she would overcome the
trial that she faced outside.
The ashes were falling and I watched, wondering what she faced out there. If she was caught,
trapped beneath the falling ashes. The very thought of ashes pouring upon her-or myself-made me sick
to my stomach. To be caught in that...
----------------------------- ----------------------
Note: Ashes=what she calls the rain when she speaks of the darkness. Milan is another character, who has just lost her father and is struggling with her own trials, and has saved Emilia from a nightmare in this fashion.
----------------------------- -------------------------
Story 2-Untitled (Because it's not the story I was planning, it's what my character made me
write. Little beeep)
It was the dawn of the world, and the sun was shining. Back then it was a very different place;
the dawn was quiet as the world fully shaped itself. The trees stretched for miles with nothing to
interrupt them but mountains and ocean. Back then there were no men; there was no mankind. It
simply did not exist.
It was before even the Elves, and it was beautiful. Everything was fresh and new. The first bird
sang to the sun and the trees. They were green and bright, happy and strong, alive and well. The
mountains were hidden behind clouds of fog, the ocean a sparkling blue going for miles, further than
the eye could see-and for me, it was far indeed.
----------------------------- ----------------------------- -----
Note: That's about the beginning of the world, same world as the other one is set in.
----------------------------- ----------------------------- -----
Story 3-Nimara (I gave into her demands to be featured in a novel)
There is a woman who they say has traveled all the world and conquered it. They say that she
has ruled; and that her kingdom was taken, destroyed by a Goddess. They say that she committed a
vile act, and that this is why her kingdom was destroyed. They say that she was a ruined woman, but
that she soon went to sleep, to wake in a thousand years and regain what she had lost.
They say many things about this woman, who is meant to sleep in a great, ruined castle upon
the blackened hill in the center of the dead capitol. Its walls of stone like an impenetrable fortress
surrounded by rubble and despair. Its cold bricks and empty hallways. Nothing is left of it but an old,
dead ruin.
---------------------
Note: Nimara was originally a character who came out of nowhere in my RP, and she has developed a fascinating story, so I am writing hers as a separate thing without any actual RP characters in it, though there will be dedication to my RP friends.
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I hope you liked them! I'll probably post some excerpts later in the month as well, though I'm not sure.
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Comment by Kleonaptra
Kalikapsychosis
Comment by Dianna G
I Wish This Was 42
Fictional Worlds
Thankies
I don't know when there will be more excerpts. I might post the full poem part of the prophecy from Nimara's, the last one. But I have to be careful how much I post, of course. I know that at least the prologue of that one will make it unscarred to the final draft.
Thanks again,
~Dianna